Friday, July 22, 2011

Why i am not married, i guess?

This has the mind of a poet but the body of a child. There needs to be more heart. The vulgar word throws it off right from the beginning and there really isn't a rhythmic flow, it's too monotone. If you want wild then let me hear the drums you seek. I like the last line but it would be stronger if there were more rhythm.

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